【简介】感谢网友“雕龙文库”参与投稿，这里小编给大家分享一些，方便大家学习。
实例指导1—未来资讯报道
【写作任务】
假设现在是2024年，你是China Daily的一名记者，请你根据下面的采访记录写—篇资讯报道。注意：要求词数：120-150。报道的格式已经给出，不计入总词数。
Xichang，Sichuan，Sep．25(Xinhua)－___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
时间顺序，包括：三名宇航员搭载飞船，实现人们登月的梦想，登月后的活动(采集研究月球表面的岩石和土壤：安装设备，建立空间站)；党和国家领导人做祝贺和鼓励的讲话等等。3)介绍事情的重大意义和结局，如：标志着中国科技和太空研究的重大突破；使得中国为继美国后第二个成功登月的国家；坚定了人们发展科技、探测太空，服务于人类的信心。
2．分析资讯报道的语言特点，选定本文的信息表达词句。
资讯报道类文章的用词准确，有时要用到专业术语，语句一般都很长，大都为结构复杂的复合句，以便包含大量精确的信息。根据这尸特点，选定该文章的表达词句如下：
【学生习作】
Xichang，Sichuan，Sep．25(Xinhua)－China successfully launched its another manned spacecraft at 9:10 p.m. on Sept. 25, 2024. The spaceship is Chang'e-4, which carries three Chinese astronauts. It will help Chinese people to ①come true their dream of space-walk on the Moon.
The astronauts will collect rocks and soil on the Moon for later study. Furthermore, they will fix some equipment there for later use to set up space stations.
The state and party leader made an important speech, ②encourage and com, ratulate those who are
working hard at the exploring of and researching into space.
The launch marks a major breakthrough in China's space program, making China the second nation, after America in the world, to walk on the Moon. We are confident that China will develop technologies to make further exploration of the outer space, benefiting the mankind in all aspects.
baord will help Chinese people to relaize their dream of space-walk on the moon。2） 文章的末段表达成功发射的意义，如果其中一部分放到介绍完领导讲话之后，就不显得这么集中了。
【参考范文】
Xichang，Sichuan，Sep．25(Xinhua)－China successfully launched its another manned spacecraft, Chang'e-4 at 9:10 p.m. on Sept. 25, 2024. The three Chinese astronauts on board will help Chinese people to realize their dream of space-walk on the Moon.
The state and party leader delivered an important'speech, offering his encouragement and
congratulations to those who have devoted all their time to the exploring of and researching into the space.
The launch marks a major breakthrough in China's space program, making China the second nation, after America in the world, to walk on the Moon. If it goes smoothly, more research will be attempted including collecting rocks and soil on the Moon for later study. Furthermore. the astronauts will fix some equipment there for later use to set up space stations.
We have great confidence that China is capable of making further exploration of the outer space by developing technologies, benefiting the mankind both in economy and lifestyles.
【佳句欣赏】
1. The three Chinese astronauts on board will help Chinese people to realize their dream of space-walk on the Moon.
2. The state and party leader delivered an important speech, offering his encouragement and congratulations to those who have devoted all their
time to the exploring of and researching into the space.
3. The launch marks a major breakthrough in China's space program, making China the second
nation; after Amerma in the world, to walk on the Moon.
实例指导2—Life In the Future
写作任务:
你校要举行一次英语演讲比赛,话题是"畅想未来生活,享受人生欢乐"。假设你已报名,请用英语写一份
120-150词的演讲稿,准备参加比赛。你可以从科技发展给人们未来的生活、学习和工作带来的影响,以及如何准备迎接挑战,适应新生活等方面展开描述和讨论。
注意:演讲稿的开头和结尾已给出,但不计入总词数。
Hello, everyone! I am glad to be able to give a talk about the future life and study here. _______________________________________________________
That’s all. Thank you!
3. 遣词造句,灵活表达。根据审题所得,将要表达的有效信息用灵活的句式表达出来,如:
1) 作为演讲内容的总括和概述,也是文章的主题句,开篇可以表达"科技发展给未来生活、学习和工作带来很大的影响"。可以运用如下几个句式:
Thanks to the great development in science and technology, we are sure to live a happier and more wonderful life in the future. 或The great development in science and technology will have a great effect on the future of our lives, work and study.等。
2)仔细分析未来生活及其巨大变化时,可以从人们的衣食住行以及学习、工作等方面加以分析与描述,可以运用not only ... but also ...等来连接这些变化,例如:Not only will we be provided with enough food and clothing, we can also spend more time traveling around the world and enjoying other amusements.以及We will have less stress in the future, either from our study or from the work.等。
3) 在发挥个人观点,叙述"准备迎接挑战,适应新生活"的建议时,可以表达为:We should work harder today, making preparations to make more contributions to the development of the future society and the world.等。
4. 巧妙过渡,自然衔接。将表达的信息用一些过渡词或短语连接成文,注意逻辑思维和行文的连贯。可以借鉴的表达有:further more, however, therefore, only in this way等。
初稿:
Hello, everyone! I am glad to be able to give a talk about the future life and study here. As we all know, science and technology has greatly developed, so we are sure to live a happier and more wonderful life in the future. We will be provided not only with enough food and clothing, but also more convenient ways of traveling and living. Besides, we will have less stress both from our study and from work, because we can work and study more efficiently. However, our future is full of challenge as well. So we should work harder today. We should try to become more knowledgeable. Only in this way can we develop more skills and earn more money for the future use. We can also enjoy a more interesting and colorful life even when we are old. That’s all. Thank you!
成稿:
Hello, everyone! I am glad to be able to give a talk about the future life and study here. Thanks to the great
development in science and technology, we are sure to live a happier and more wonderful life in the future. Not only will we be provided with enough food and clothing, we can also spend more time traveling around the world and enjoying other amusements. It will make our spare time more interesting and colorful. Furthermore, we will have less stress either from our study or from the work since we can work more efficiently. However, our future life is not just full of amusement and joy, but also of challenge. Therefore, we should work harder today, making preparations to make more contributions to the development of the future society and the world. Only in this way can we adapt to the future life and enjoy ourselves when it comes.
That’s all. Thank you!
Powerful sentences:
1. To keep fit, we need variety in our diets. A healthy diet generally includes proper amounts of fish, meat, vegetables and fruit.
2. Just imagine the beautiful surroundings in the future if we keep on planting more trees around us both in the cities and in the countryside.
3. Compared to the life we live today, the future will be more convenient and fast-paced thanks to the advance in science and technology.
4. The rapid development of science and technology will make it possible for human beings to fly to other planets to study the situations there.
实例指导3—一千年之后
【写作任务】
科技在高速发展，人类在不断进步。那么，一千年之后我们的生活会是什么样子呢?请你充分展开想象，描述未来1000年后人类的生活。
词数：120—150。
注意：开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
What may life be like on the earth in 1,000 years'time ?
So I believe that the simple and effective life in the future will be much better than it is now.
What may life be like on the earth in 1.000 years’s time ?
Supposing we are now in the year 3009, and we are going to travel to the Sahara from China. Do we need to book a ticket or should we bring enough food and water supplies? No. All that we need to do is to send everything into the computer and then get it out from the computer right at the destination. But how does that come about? It is done by the space tunnel .It is the development oftechnol ogy that makes it possible for human beings to travel everywhere.
Robots will be even more popular. As a result, human beings will free themselves from the physical work. But the most exciting thing is that no one will suffer from illness because there are no more diseases.
So I believe that the simple and effective life in the future will be much better than it is now
实例指导4— 月球旅行
【写作任务】
假如你要去月球旅行，那么，在月球上的衣食住行都需要进行特殊的设计。本次写作任务是要求你充
分发挥自己的想象力，就自己这次旅行中可能遇到的问题提出解决的方案。
As we all known① , the temperature on the moon is quite different from the earth②.
At daytime, it is more than 100 °C, at night it is －60°C, both of them ④ can kill us. So, a specially designed suit is of great importance. In the daytime it can block out most of the heat from the sun. But at night we can just press a button and change it into a thick suit with warm air inside to protect us. Besides, there's a system that can make our bodies hot⑤. This way, we can have a safe and pleasant trip there.
【教师点评】
本篇习作中作者根据写作提示和要点基本完成了写作任务。丈中作者使用了许多较为高级的词汇、短语，及较复杂句式。此外，文中还使有了一些连接词语如but，besides等，使得文章流畅、完整，体现了作者具有一定的语言运用能力。
当然，本文在行文中也有一些英、汉表达和词语使用等方面的错误，建议修改如下：
①为语法错误，应改为As we all know或As is known to all…。
②为汉语式表达方式，应改为different from that on the earth。
③为行文错误，应在at night前加while一词。
④为语法错误，根据语境应改为both of which．．．，为非限制性定语从句。
⑤为汉语式表达方式，而且意思与前句有些重复，可以去掉这句话。
【参考范文】
As we all know. the temperature on the moon is quite different from that on the earth.
In the daytime, the temperature rises to more than 100°C, while at night it drops to as Iow as -60 °C. both of which are just unbearable for us human beings. So, a specially designed suit is of greta importance for us. In the daytime it can block out most of the heat from the sun, but when night comes, it can change into a thick suit with warm air inside to protect us. This way, we can have a safe and pleasant trip there.
实例指导5—How to describe your future life form
【写作任务】
某校学生会对在校学生就“未来理想的工作”这一问题做了一份调查，下表显示了调查结果。
介绍图表的全部内容并发表你的自己的看法。
注意：词数120左右。
【范文欣赏】
The chart above shows us what kind of job the students prefer to do when they grow up. More than 25
percent of the students want to be a boss and about 25 percent of the students want to be a government official in the future.
While over 15 percent of the students are in favour of being a lawyer. The least number of students, less than 5 percent would like to become stars and slightly more than ten percent of them would like to be teachers. Nearly 15 percent of the students want to choose other jobs.
So many people want to be an official. Maybe we can get better service from the government. In my opinion, no matter what job the students would like to do it in the future, they should think about
making contributions to other people and to our country,
实例指导6----你是否愿意成为师范生
写作任务: 今年,教育部直属师范大学将招收一批免费师范生,学生毕业后须回生源所在省份的中小学任教十年以上。你班同学就此在英语课上进行了一次主题为"你是否愿意成为一名免费师范生"的讨论,请你为此次讨论写一篇120-150词的发言稿。
【写作指导】
this policy is very good for us, for it is free and I can save a lot of money for my family; it is a good chance for me to work for people ...
③总结概括:
If I get the chance and become a teacher, I would ...
初稿:
I have read about the news that students who want to teach in his or her hometown for at least 10 years can study at some colleges for free. If I had the chance, I would become a teacher in my hometown. Firstly, to be a teacher is my dream. When I was young I admired my teacher very much and I wanted to be a teacher in the future. Secondly, this policy is very good for us, for it is free. It is very expensive for me to have college education, especially because my parents are workers, so I want to help them to save money. Thirdly, I want to get the chance to serve the people in my hometown. All in all, I’m willing to teach the children and achieve my true value in my hometown.
1. 初稿根据题目要求,表明了自己的观点,解释了具体的原因。全文覆盖了所有内容要点,完成了试题规定的写作任务。语法结构和词汇选用方面虽然存在些许错误,但并未影响全篇内容的表达。此外,文章还有效地使用了语句间的连接成分,过渡自然,行文连贯,表达比较准确。
2. 文章存在的问题:
①在陈述观点时,作者使用了含有虚拟语气的复合句:If I had the chance, I would become a teacher in my hometown.这不符合表达的习惯,因为这是将来的打算,最好不用虚拟语气,建议将其改为If I have the chance, I want to be a teacher in my hometown.
②在列举第二个理由时,作者用了一个长句,同时使用了because和so来连接分句,so应该去掉。
③文中有些语句的表述欠妥,建议做些改动,如"It is very expensive for us to have college education"等。
④文章仅从作者本身的角度进行了论述,也可以在文章结尾总结的时候适当阐述一下该政策对国家及公众的好处。
成稿:
I’m glad to hear the news that our government will help students study at some colleges for free if they are willing to teach in their hometowns for at least 10 years after graduation. I hope I can get such a chance to be a teacher.
Firstly, to be a teacher is my dream. When I was still a kid, I admired teachers very much, and I hoped I myself could be a teacher someday. Secondly, I think I can benefit a lot from this policy, because it means that I can get a free college education. My parents are both workers and it is hard for them to earn money, so I hope I can save some money for them. Thirdly, it will be a good chance for me to work for the people in my hometown. All in all, I hope I can come back to teach the children in my hometown and try to achieve my own goals as well. And I believe there will be more and more qualified teachers working in remote areas in the near future.
实例指导7---- My dream
【写作任务】
